Before I
began to write, I thought of the values that define who I am, and why some of
my memories that I had are more prominent than others. I than began to write
about those memories in vivid detail, and I tried to replicate the mindset that
I had in that point in time. That being said, some of my earlier snapshots are
italicized because they highlight my thought
process more than the scene itself. The italicized snapshots indicate my
youth, and also indicate my discovery of the world around me. I’ve arranged the snapshots chronologically, because
I wanted to show my sense of character being built upon. These snapshots aren’t
necessarily a description of what was around me in that place and time, but
rather, it was a journey on how I became the person that I am today.
Not all
snapshots follow a definitive format, though. Some of them describe what I am
thinking; others describe what I’m doing. For example, I had a really short and
simple snapshot in the middle of the paper that I only added since it was a
decision that changed the person that I am today. Most snapshots were a
specific experience at a specific point in time, but the one snapshot that
stands out to most readers and even to me is the snapshot where I talk about my
confused state of mind. I added that to show the emotional conflict that I go
through, and it seems out of place and confusing only because to me, it is out
of place and confusing.
The
snapshots that I have scrapped are some of my cool experiences that didn’t
really tell who I was. I had plenty of ideas to write from, but it was hard to
find experiences that had significance.
Even though snapshots such as the marching in the Tournament of Roses Parade
and playing in Carnegie Hall didn’t show much meaning behind the person that I
necessarily was, it was added in since those are memories that I’ll never forget.
Therefore, they have a more personal significance to me. Even though I’ve been
to many outstanding places in the world, many just weren’t included simply due
to the fact that it’s not as memorable. Heck, even when writing this blog post,
I thought of all the awesome places and why I didn’t write about them, but now
I know why. Those places aren’t as significant.
I like how you chose to organize you snap shots with the italicizing. I haven't even read your paper but you seem to have small variations in the style of your snapshots so it seems like it would be enjoyable to read and not monotone. Also it appears that you have very good focus and meaning behind your snap shots. Which means nothing to me as a reader but i can tell that a lot of thought went in to each snap shot you decided to include.
ReplyDeleteI really like that your snapshots vary between what you're thinking and what you're doing. The italicization of your thoughts convey to the reader that what you're thinking is more personal and honest. My snapshots include my personal opinions, but not thoughts. Snapshots don't follow any specific format, and I think you took advantage of that in a great way. In the future I'll try to be more creative and think outside the box.
ReplyDeleteAs mentioned before, I like your style of italicizing certain words. It draws the reader in and allows the author to have a conversation with the reader. It makes the reader feel engaged. Your sentence structure also demonstrates that you know how to flip-flop between long sentences and short staccato phrases. It gives the piece of writing some flavor. I also like that you chose memories to write about that had actual significance, not necessarily always for the reader but, significance non the less.
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