Original Paragraph: We got out of the car and my mom hurried my barely 50 pound body along into the huge white and tan building. It seemed as if my whole life had been interrupted. I had gotten accustomed to watching cartoon network at my grandma’s house all day. It’s like one day my parents had a top-secret conversation up to ruin my life and make me start school. We hurried down the hallway which smelled like newly waxed floors. At the end was a large red door propped wide open with the words “WELCOME TO KINDERGARTEN!” I walked into the door grasping my moms hand as tight as my five year old body could and was immediately greeted by an older woman who introduced herself as my teacher. Confused, I said hi and then hid behind my mom’s legs. “I’m Mrs. Barquin, honey there’s no need to be shy” the wrinkly old woman. Nothing that woman could have said would make me feel any more comfortable with her. After all she was a stranger and mom always said don’t talk to strangers.
Much shorter syllables:
I got out of the car. Walked to my class with my mom. It was a big building. my life was over. i just wanted to watch tv. my mom and dad and me go. i walked in class and was scared. my teacher said hi but i was scared. She didn't want me scared but i still was. She was a stranger to me.
I chose to do this exercise because it showed that while reading a paper, it can always broken down into something more understandable. I'm in no way saying that the original was hard to understand but this is a very good device for reading harder material. This exercise that I did was simply making larger sentences as close to one syllable as possible. This could be more useful when reading a science book or even hard literature in english.
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