Blog #3

Exercise #: 4

A. One day, my friend and I thought it was a good idea to try sneaking out in the middle of the night to hang out with a few friends. Keep in mind, we had done this many times before and have never been caught. This night was a little different. Long story short, my parents went absolutely nuts when they realized I was gone. When I came home to talk things out, it was a complete yell off. The one thing I remember most was when my father stuck his pointer finger in my face and backed me into a wall with it as he said “I wish you weren’t my daughter.” As soon as those words left his mouth I immediately burst into tears and felt my whole body shaking with rage, anger, sadness, fear, every bad emotion into one, it was indescribable how I truly felt in that moment. My God-fearing father just told me he wishes his only daughter didn’t even exist. It may have been an in the moment type of anger but I was just so shocked by it I could not contain myself and my entire body couldn’t function for a good hour. I didn’t speak to my parents for at least a month after that day. It still saddens me to look back and remember what happened that day.

B. One day, the friends thought it was a good idea to try sneaking out in the middle of the night to hang out with a few others. Keep in mind, they had done this many times before and have never been caught. This night was a little different. Long story short, Hannah’s parents went absolutely nuts when they realized she was gone. When she came home to talk things out, it was a complete yell off. The one thing she remembers most was when my father stuck his pointer finger in her face and backed me into a wall with it as he said “I wish you were never my daughter.” As soon as those words left his mouth she immediately burst into tears and her whole body started shaking with rage, anger, sadness, fear, every bad emotion into one, it was indescribable how she truly felt in that moment. This God-fearing father of hers just told me he wishes his only daughter didn’t even exist. It may have been an in the moment type of anger but even so, she  was just so shocked by it, she could not contain herself and her entire body couldn’t function for a good hour. Hannah didn’t speak to her parents for at least a month after that day. It still saddens her to looking back and remembering what happened that day.

C. One day, your friends thought it was a good idea to try sneaking out in the middle of the night to hang out with a few friends. Keep in mind, you had done this many times before and have never been caught. This night was a little different though. Long story short, your parents went absolutely nuts when they realized you was gone. When you came home to talk things out, it was a complete yell off. The one thing you remember most was when your father stuck his pointer finger in your face and backed you into a wall with it as he said “I wish you weren’t my daughter.” As soon as those words left his mouth you immediately burst into tears and your whole body started shaking with rage, anger, sadness, fear, every bad emotion into one, it was indescribable how you truly felt in that moment. Your God-fearing father just told me he wishes his only daughter didn’t even exist. It may have been an in the moment type of anger but you were just so shocked by it you could not contain yourself and your entire body couldn’t function for a good hour. You didn’t speak to your parents for at least a month after that day. It still saddens you to look back and remember what happened that day.

Exercise #: 5

One day, we thought it was a good idea to try sneaking out in the middle of the night to hang out with a few friends. Keep in mind, we had done this many times before and have never been caught. This night was a little different. Long story short, my parents went absolutely nuts when they realized something was missing. When we came home to talk things out, it was a complete yell off. The one thing remembered most from that night was when my father stuck his pointer finger in my face and backed me into a wall with it as he said “I wish you weren’t my daughter.” As soon as those words left his mouth, tears immediately fell and felt my whole body was shaking with rage, anger, sadness, fear, every bad emotion into one, it was indescribable how strong my emotions were in that moment. My God-fearing father just told me he wishes his only daughter didn’t even exist. It may have been an in the moment type of anger but it was just so shocking and and my entire body couldn’t function for a good hour. Not one word was communicated for at least a month between us after that.  It still saddens me to look back and remember what happened that day.

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I chose these exercises  because I thought it would be interesting to see my story from different points of views. Both these exercises require me changing the point of view from first person to an alternate perspective. It lays out a well revised comparison that I can possibly use in my revision process. Different points of view allow me to see what sounds better to the reader or when using less “I’s” to sound less choppy. I think doing this helps me see my writing from an outsider perspective as a reader more than the writer. It makes me less bias toward my writing because I see what the story may sound like to any one person reading it. I believe it is important to have variety, especially in different snap shots, because it draws the reader in more to not be bored or have a perspective be overused to the extent that it is repetitive.