Blog #3 Jan Stary

The exercises that we had to complete were somewhat interesting. I like them because they offer a different perspective into our writing. For specifically, I like the first exercise I chose. The first exercise I chose was the one where you take one of your snapshots and break it up into little constituent sentences. The example given in the textbook was "I leaned down nearly horizontally to wedge myself into the red roadster." This was then broken down into "I leaned down. I was nearly horizontal. I wedged myself into the roadster. The roadster was red."
I took the snapshot where I wrote about Twizzlers and decided that it would be the paragraph I would modify. The following are the constituent sentences:

I was very little. I loved all kinds of candy. I had a very strong sweet-tooth. I didn’t like peanut butter. Now, I love peanut butter. I am practically in love with it. It’s fascinating how taste buds change. I was in Walgreens. I was browsing the aisles. Meanwhile, I was eating Twizzlers. I began to feel weird. My stomach was uneasy My moral about recuperation declined. I rushed to the bathroom. I threw up. The Twizzlers were escaping me. The event turned me away from Twizzlers. I may have a PTSD from the event. I haven’t like Twizzlers since the event.

When an individual is in possession of little constituent sentences, more ideas are ready to flow. The individual may put the sentences back together in a way that was better than the original paragraph. This provides progress in a writer and in turn, makes the individual a better writer. I would highly recommend this process; however, it is somewhat time consuming.

Another thing I liked was re-writing the paragraphs. I believe this allows the individual to pay more attention to grammar and sentence structure. Mistakes are spotted with ease when something the individual is attempting to modify doesn't sound write. If this happens, the writer can quickly make corrections and the piece of writing is just that much better.